Thorfinn the Shallow Minded Posted March 27, 2014 Author Report Share Posted March 27, 2014 I am back again now with article reviews. Currently I intend to point out problems with the current articles to show the needs and hope to with time adjust them. For the moment I have looked into the Athenian articles. History Articles Still Needed Athens:Prodomos: Too generalTrireme: Too longLithobolos: Simply explains the mechanics. Compare to Oxybeles.Epibates Marine: No ArticleThemistocles: Alter "whom" to "who" in first sentence. Further alterations could be done to improve this.Pericles: Too short. An article was written by me that should fix that.Iphicrates: No articleOikos: Too general for Athenians.Agros: Olive growing is a form of agriculture.Apotheke: Too self explanatoryOutpost: Again too self-explanatory and not relevantPalisade: Self-explanatoryLimen: Focus more on AthensKhalkeion: Does not specifically inform about the metallurgy in AthensPyrgos: Self-explanatoryPylai: "pierced" is not a very good description in the first sentence. Perhaps "dotted?"Theatron: Refer to the theaters as Athenian, not Greek.Parthenon: No articleSilver Owls: Refer to the coin as "obol," the proper title.Iphicratean Reforms: No article 4 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Thorfinn the Shallow Minded Posted March 29, 2014 Author Report Share Posted March 29, 2014 History Articles Still Needed Britons: Epos: Fragment for second to last sentence: I would recommend combining it as a descriptive clause with the sentence before. Gaisaredos: It would be advisable to be more specific as far as the pronouns are concerned for coherency's sake. I could otherwise be difficult to understand. Druides: Parallel structure for the list: I keep the plurality the same during it. Curoca: The tense changes from past to present tense. This is a distracting issue. Uertamika Kilngetoi: The tense again changes. Staying in past tense would be advisable. Carbanto: Remove the commas from the second and third sentences. Simbalos: The word plough is spelled in the British way, which is not proper considering that some words have been changed to the American spelling. I would recommend having one or the other spelling form be used instead of both. Ovidos: No article. 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lion.Kanzen Posted May 5, 2016 Report Share Posted May 5, 2016 Can be nice have this kind of people be volunteer and eventually by part of the staff, he can give maintenance of our own wiki. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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